In this part of the story, Sir
Caldor the Brave and Edward the Page have just met the fire dragon. Describe
the fire dragon in detail. Try to use expanded noun phrases to help you, for
example the dragon’s rancid fiery breath or his razor-sharp teeth.
Remember to read your work carefully before you post. Make sure you have added your name (first name only please).
The big tall dragon has extremely sharp, large teeth under his fire-breathing breath. Also when a dragon bites an animal or a human it's venom is mortal. On it's back there is a monstrous scales. Unfortunetly it throws huge, dangarous fire balls. It's eyes are as frightening as the eyes of a slithery snake. But the best thing about it is that it has long stumppy wings.
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DeleteSome fantastic similes Elena-well done!
DeleteRemember when you use an apostrophe for it-it's, it means 'it is,' for everything else, use its.
Sir Caldor the Brave was battling with the fire dragon so it dose n't
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towns but then Sir Caldor the Brave died by the fire dragon and only Edward was there to it then he
stated to fight the fire dragon and with Sir Caldors stuff and Edward killed the fire dragon.
by Mafalda
A good explanation Mafalda. Can you use copy and paste to edit your work so that you only use 'and' once in a sentence. Replace some of them with full stops.
DeleteThe fire dragon looked down at them. It’s scales glinted brightly in the hot sun that hung in the blue sky above them and his eyes glowed a deep blood red. Around his tall proud neck was a golden amulet made of thick squares of gold. On the middle one there was a huge keyhole and on the others had strange, meaningless symbols. The dragons spikes glittered amber on it’s arched back.
ReplyDeleteHis jagged horns stood like sharp flint stones and twirled round and round. His big oval nostrils let out wisps of humid, sticky smoke and his mouth blew out flames of fire. The monstrous tail swiped swiftly sideways. It’s toenails were so shiny clear that you could see your reflection in them. The dragon’s wings were the most magnificent thing about the dragon. They were a dark shade of scarlet and it descended into amber and finally into pale yellow. It had hot pink sparkles and a black border for the wings.It stood up majestically and picked Sir Calder the brave and carried him away.
By, Vibha
Wow Vibha! This is great work. You've chosen your words and phrases really carefully.
DeleteSee my comment above re it's and its.
The dragon is a dangerous because had a long neck and tail. His razor, sharp teeth and fiery breath it is very angry. Wings are very large but his ears are tufted.
ReplyDeleteHis scaly skin is so hard like iron sword.
By Bartek.
I love the idea that its skin is hard like an iron sword Bartek, that was very imaginative and conjured up a vivid image in my mind!
Deletethank you for that miss sharratt
DeleteThe dragon
ReplyDeleteThe fierce scary dragon had sharp pointy teeth. His skin colour was as red as fire. As he blew hot burning fire out of his terrifying jagged teeth inside his mouth it sounded like if it was a dinosaur! It felt looked as if it was made out of fire. His long rock looking tail swung from side to side horrifyingly! The dragon was thundering across the area in anger. The serrated pointy ears were flying around every where like mad aeroplane with no wings making its way down. ananya
Well done Ananya. I love the choice of the verb 'thundered'.
DeleteThank you Miss Sharratt
DeleteAnanya
The fire dragon has a large pointy spines with lots of holes on the scales. It has a huge neck with a keyhole in it. Sir Caldor the Brave has been sent to unlock it and take out all the bad power which had been created by a wizard.King Hugo has the golden key to unlock it.the fire dragon also has big wings and makes a aeroplane air when it fly up.When it breath, smoke comes out like a smoking chimney.He is taller than the mountain and as wider than a house. Soham
ReplyDeleteGreat work Soham. Some fantastic similes and expanded noun phrases.
DeleteThe green dragon.
ReplyDeleteThe giant dragon was as big as a house it had four legs with sharp claws, its skin was green rough and scaly and it stuck. It had a big head as big as a small car, it had sharp yellow teeth it also had horns and red fierce eyes. it had two huge wings as big as our school playground. Its tail was long and spiky. Arya
Some fantastic ideas her Arya. Can you use copy and paste to edit your work and post it again. Make sure you have written in full sentences and that you use full stops, not commas at the end of each sentence.
DeleteThe green dragon.
DeleteThe giant dragon was as big as a house it had four legs with sharp claws.Its skin was green rough and scaly and it stunck. It had a big head as big as a small car, it had sharp yellow teeth it also had horns and red fierce eyes. it had two huge wings as big as our school playground. Its tail was long and spiky. Arya
The fire dragon has a spikes all over his back they are as sharp as a diamonds. Also he breaths out smoke that is like fog. He has a hilly and bumpy belly. Also he has a golden necklace witch is shiny so he does not become good unless someone finds the key.
ReplyDeleteHe has huge wings with claws on them. Also he has very sharp claws.
KAVIN
You used some really interesting similes Kawin, well done.
DeleteCheck the difference between breath and breathe.
Aisha
ReplyDeleteThe fire dragon has sharp teeth and pointy long nails. However it has huge red eyes and big smelly ears. Well it dose have tall big wings also it has a big belly button. Finally it also breathe fire.
Well done Aisha.I loved the idea that the dragon has a big belly button!
DeleteCheck your use of the word 'however'. It has a similar meaning to 'but'.
Aisha
DeleteThe fire dragon has sharp teeth and pointy long nails. But it has huge red eyes and big smelly ears. Well it dose have tall big wings also it has a big belly button. Finally it also breathe fire.
The fire dragon is a fiery dragon that goes around fires his his breth at peopal. I think the fire dragon is ferousious,clever,scary,frighning and big. I am so scared of him by tommy
ReplyDeleteWell done Tommy-you came up with a good list of adjectives. Remember to spell check your work before you post.
Deletegood describing words tommy by Kavin
DeleteThe mighty dragon battles fearlessly displaying his muscular limbs. His wings spread wide forming a canopy over his attackers, who tirelessly strike the dragon with their swords. The dragon's scaly skin is as tough as iron and shields it from attack. Razor-sharp spines align the dragon's back, providing protection. The dragon's arrowhead tail is as tough as rock and flips his prey. His ferocious glare and dagger like horns look down at the attackers. His large nostrils breathe red-hot flames warding off the attackers. His clawed feet stand firm on the rocks, ready to pierce his prey.
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Wow Arnav! This is a fantastic description and you should be very proud of your work. I can see that you have chosen your words very carefully. I especially liked your first sentence.
DeleteThe fire dragon is so terrifying that it feels like your going to be as dead as a doornail. It has hot smoke coming out of its nose. Also it has a petrifying face and strange hot eyes.
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Thank you Methmi. I loved the phrase 'strange hot eyes'.
DeleteCan you write a sentence using "your" and a sentence using "you're"?
The fire dragon's eyes were red and blooded also filled with anger. The breath of the dragon was like he didn't do teeth brush when he was born thats why people hate his smell." YUCK"
ReplyDeleteWell done Haaris. I like the idea that the dragon's eyes are filled with anger.
DeleteRemember to use apostrophes to show where letters are missing. E.g That is becomes that's.
I liked the word red blooded very much harris by kavin
DeleteFire Dragon
ReplyDeleteOnce there was dragon with a flaming wheeze and accurate teeth, I was aghast. The monster had tapering spines and a swiftly arrow shaped tail with on neck was a potholed lead , in the middle was a golden key hole. The dragon had thin unsteady wings, he had eyes the colour of moss and he stared at something each second .It shook swiftly and stomped on pretty landscapes. The monster had terrible blood splashes on himself , also he had smoke coming out from his nose which was dreadful.
From Ithisha
Well done Itisha. I loved your description of the dragon's eyes.
DeleteCheck the meaning of the word accurate. Can you choose another word to use here?
The tiney grass dragon has glowing emrald green scales going down his back. His claws are black glistening knives. His eyes are as bright as dimond, and as angry as fire. His wings are as sharp as his razor claws, and as scaley as a lizard. his glowing green flames are as bright as neon and as hot as the summer sun.
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Some great similes and metaphors Mal, well done.
DeleteRemember to use capital letters at the start of sentences.
The Fire dragon has a scabby, black back, a silver grey armour-plated belly, claws like a blade of a sword, devilish, glowing, red eyes. It has colossal wings which could easily make a hurricane with a few flaps. The dragon deafens everyone with it’s ear splitting shriek, but worse, its breath smells of rotting sewage. It is offensive to the senses. The creature has such a pointy tail that looks like a spear, it is long, thick and it cracks like a whip. The beast’s mouth is always ablaze with fire. The menacing beast is muscular and brutal. The dragon is… dreadful!
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Fantastic writing Eva, well done!
DeleteI especially liked this sentence: The dragon deafens everyone with it’s ear splitting shriek, but worse, its breath smells of rotting sewage.
When Edward the Page and Caldor the Brave saw the fire dragon. It had red shiny eyes.A long green back covered in scales.With pointy sharp teeth and a long scaly tail wich was 100 metres long.It had a firey hot breath along with its colossal size with a whopping size of 200 metres tall!
ReplyDeleteBy Ashlyn
You used some good expanded noun phrases, well done.
DeleteThese two phrases:
When Edward the Page and Caldor the Brave saw the fire dragon.
A long green back covered in scales.With pointy sharp teeth and a long scaly tail wich was 100 metres long.
are not full sentences on their own. Can you copy and paste your word and adjust the punctuation so that it is all written in full sentences?
i liked the word pointy sharp teeth Ashlyn by Kavin
DeleteThe fire dragons eyes were darker than blood. The dragon`s teeth were sharp as a blade. It had scales harder than a golden sword. The dragon`s wings are thinner than a piece of paper on the floor. It had smock coming out of his nose and it shot fire in every 5 seconds in the air. The dragon tail was full with scales.
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Well done Itquan. Your first sentence is fantastic (and scary!).
Deletethank you
DeleteThe monstrous dragon is gigantic.It has huge head and it is very scaly.The dragon has sharp large teeth that could slice everything.Its body is covered with black scales.The fierce dragon has very long tail.It has red flaming eyes like two balls of fire.It has very savage claws that were so sharp.The dragon can fly with his two deceptively strong wings.The dragon blows fire.
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Kristen
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DeleteThe dragon is huge and fearsome.The monster has a fiery breath.It has a long tail that could kill you in one swipe and it also has sharp spikes on his back.It has enormous wings.The beast has extremely sharp claws.He wears a golden collar which needs a shiny golden key.The most terrifying part is his look at me because of his deadly sight.The frightening dragon gives me ghoost bumps.
ReplyDeleteBy Igor
Well done Igor, you chose some fantastic descriptive phrases.
DeleteThe beast very old and huge .With a scaley long tail and massive
ReplyDeletewings . The beast has tall ears with scary eyes that are gloomy
at night . The beast has firey breath and smokey breath .
Well done Tally, you used some great expanded noun phrases. Can you have a look at your first sentence-what should it be?
DeleteIt was a huge dragon fire breathing and a pointy tail on his back and spiky tooths in his mouth he had smoke in his nostrils and lived in a cave. DAWID
ReplyDeleteFire dragon is big and old. His claws are sharp as blade. He has long tail and huge wings.His eyes are evil and red as blood. The smelly smoke come from his nose.
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